Five Quick Fixes To Make Your Essay Better Right Now
February 1, 2018 § 27 Comments
Not “feeling it,” but need to get some writing in? Don’t have time for a long sit at the coffee shop, but you might have fifteen minutes before carpool? Technical fixes are the way to go.
1. Check for “was verb-ing” constructions. In Microsoft Word, do a wildcard search:
- Open Advanced Find and Replace
- Check the box for Wildcards On
- Put this in Find, including the <> part: <was [a-z]@ing>
- Repeat with <were [a-z]@ing>
- Each time a “being verb-ing” construction pops up, ask “Is my intention here to communicate an ongoing state that is still happening?” If the answer is no, switch tenses. Was running=ran. Were talking=talked.
2. Remove most of “that.” Many writers use “that” as a tic rather than for deliberate emphasis or grammatical need. “That” adds a slight stiltedness to your natural writing voice. Again, use your trusty Find and Replace. Keep only the “thats” you need for sense.
I never considered that he would run away
I never considered he would run away.
3. Start and finish sentences with strong words. When possible, restructure sentences to begin and end with nouns or verbs rather than prepositions or filler words.
Besides all that, he was mean, kind of.
Pat was also kind of mean.
When you’re comfortable putting strong words in the anchor positions, start paying attention to the sounds. Sharp consonant sounds (d, g, k, p, etc.) make good emphatic sentences:
Pat was also kind of a dick. On Wednesdays, he threw rocks at his dog.
For more flow, choose sounds that slide into the next sentence, like m, n and s:
Pat was mean. Everyone knew about the poor dog, and what happened on Wednesdays.
4. Count prepositional phrases. Long sentences can be great. But when a sentence feels clunky, sometimes that’s due to too many prepositional phrases.
We walked down the hall on that afternoon, the birds diving into the water beneath the windows, where we’d sat last week pledging our love for one another.
Prepositional phrases navigate time and space. Each new phrase relocates the reader: down the hall, on that afternoon, into the water, beneath the window, where we’d sat, last week, for one another. It’s not just that the sentence is long–it’s that the reader mentally visits seven different locations.
5. Use a word cloud. Using an online tool like Wordle, copy-paste your whole document to create a picture of all the words you use. The words are sized according to their frequency. For over-used words (often that, just, got, around, felt, looked, like) do a search, and each time the word pops up, ask if it’s needed and if it’s the right word in that location. Edit ruthlessly. The big exception is “said” in dialogue–usually, “said” becomes a neutral word like “the,” and it’s better to use “said” than get fancy with dialogue tags.
Bonus thinking time: If there’s a “bad guy” in your story, or someone opposed to your objective, imagine the story from their POV. How are they acting heroically within their own worldview? What do they believe in? How are you thwarting them? Next time you revise, keep in mind there’s another version of the story in which your opponent is the hero. Give the reader little hints of that story, too.
Happy writing–with or without inspiration.
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Allison K Williams is Brevity’s Social Media Editor and the author of Seven Drafts: Self-Edit Like a Pro from Blank Page to Book. Want writing news, events, and upcoming webinars? Join the A-List!
A blessing on your house. I will share this today!
ohhh, this is handy, ta!
god, you’re good, akw. thank you so much!
Thank you! You cleared That up for me.
Excellent advice. Also you can probably track down that pesky fact that you have been needing to nail down for weeks/months/years.
Yes!
The word cloud or word search feature is indispensable for finding words you have overused. In a recent book draft, my agent suggested I had used the word “seem” way too often. It “seems” I had unwittingly used it 57 times! That one word had softened many a sentence. I cut them all except 4.
love this idea–never thought to try it!
I use “that” because I was a philosophy major, and it’s a semantics thing. Just a point to consider.
Can you explain what “that” does semantically in philosophy?
Yes, it refers to something directly and alludes to its characteristics. For example, I don’t actually think something is funny. Funny is not an attribute intrinsic to something. I think that something is funny. Probably not a great example, but of been out of college for a while. Ha!
I relate to that.
thank you! this is
very helpful.
Just shared! I love the Wordle idea.
This was FANTASTIC advice, for which I thank you! I printed it out so that I can remind myself about it every now and then.
This is such great, practical advice. Thank you! *Bookmarks forever*
Outstanding, practical, inspired–per usual.
Thanks for the “Bonus” ideas–excellent.
Great ideas! I’ve also forwarded and printed for future use. I especially love Wordle. The fun visual makes the pill of overuse easier to swallow.
Wow, this is so useful. I’m putting it next to my computer. I would add one more: overusing “and,” “or” and “but.”
It was pretty much helpful…thank you!!!!
Grateful for such a concise, pragmatic “self- edit” piece.
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“That” is my tick. Also, “just.”
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Great techniques. Always good to be reminded of them.
Somehow, this is exactly what I needed today! Ten thousand thanks!